Jasmine Hart

Your imagery is lovely and I love your use of sibilance. You convey the scene really vividly. I'd puntuate a bit more, and also break some of teh lines up ...

Hi. :) Pm me if you want to do a co-write. If you want to get a sense of my writing, there are a couple of stories in my portfolio, ...

Abigail I helped to make the tea. It was nice to be somewhat useful. Once the spoons were clinking in the cups, once food was being eaten and polite conversation ...

Mason arrived soon after, almost running, his eyes wild. I think the "almost" got me round this, but let me know if you feel it needs to be changed. Is ...

Raine I stumbled a little, then turned back to scowl at him. How dare he push me? I could feel the anger boiling up in the pit of my stomach, ...

Raine Useless, the lot of them. I'd talked to almost everyone I could find, the men in particular as it was easier to get them to talk, and not one ...

Love the plot you put me in Kit. Looking forward to getting started. :)

Tempest Tempest frowned, and clucthed the leads more tightly. Perhaps she'd been mistaken. She wasn't about to say anything more than was required.She looked at the woman again. She didn't ...

Thanks dudes. Briar The house felt strange. Usually, our mother could be heard busteling around, maybe singing to herself as she went about her chores. I wasn't going to cry. ...

Lol. Of course you were already, and seen as you've posted, you've maintained the position.JFW, I don't think it's neccessary to kill her, we can just have her as a ...

Ok, you've caught me, I'm intrigued... Name: Raine Marie Moran Age: 19 Hair: Wavy blonde/brown hair down to her waist. She usually wears a scarf in it. Eyes: Grey, framed ...

April: 1) Novel neglected. 2)Still journalling 3)30 poems 4) Story was done on the 30th of April, but done nonetheless. 5)Submitted five poems and a story. 6) Everything from last ...

Ok. TNCowgirl thinks she'll drop out, and JFW is going to drop out though has kindly offered to make a couple more posts for Holly before she leaves. I'll presume ...

Tempest Tempest stopped suddenly as she heard footsteps approaching.Voices were coursing their way through the trees. "Sit," she told the dogs. "Sit." Being far more obidient than Rover, they obeyed. ...

You're amazing Kit, thanks so much! I'll send you "Standing on a Glacier", and I'll look at making the changes you've suggested. You're brilliant. Thank you so much. :D